Why am I a worthy candidate to receive a scholarship? When a grown man of 33 years of age looks in to the future what does he see? Many beautiful houses, kids laughing as they ride there bikes down the street, families leaving on week long vacations, kids telling other kids that their mom is a doctor, and their father well has been layed off or is flipping Big Macs at the local McDonalds. I have a beautiful family, and a loving wife that supports me on the decision to return to college after being gone for 10 years.
My father after graduating from high school enlisted into the United States Navy, and served our country over in Vietnam. My mother after graduating high school started to work for Mr. Ralph Stolle. My parents never had the opportunity to go to college and receive a Degree, and the thought of finally being the first person in my family to receive a degree makes me proud, and would make my family proud. To have a career that my children, my wife and I can be proud of, and not afraid to say “My father or husband is a Medical Laboratory Technician is a proud and goose bump feeling to have.
I am worthy of a scholarship because I work hard for everything I have. I want to be able to support my family during hard economical times. Layoffs from major manufactures only depress, and put a financial burden on the family. I want to be able to do more than flip the big Macs at McDonalds for seven dollars per hour. When I go to a special event or even hang out with new friends sometimes its embarrassing to actually tell them what you do for a living. That is when the bad conscience takes hold and says to me “ Just tell them something like you’re a doctor or some kind of professional!” is what I would say but not all the time. I grew tired of saying that along time ago. Now I’m not getting any older and wiser I need and want to study hard and receive my degree and give back to people and my family what they have been missing from me for the past 15 years.
The scholarship that you are offering will help me to achieve my goals by supplying the money for tuition and books. My finances are wrapped up pretty tight in the web of this economic crunch. Family is very important to me and my wife and kids are all in school and now I want to go to school, work and receive my degree from Edison State Community College in Piqua, Ohio. When I look to the future pass the point of receiving my degree I dream of someday being able to teach other students like myself and give them the knowledge and strength to accomplish their dreams and aspirations just as I will teach and Inspire my children to believe they can accomplish anything they want if they are determined and want to work just a little harder.
This is why I deserve the scholarship and how it will help me achieve my goals.
Would you proof read my essay for a college scholarship?
Yeah....no....not too well written. I would guessed a 15 year old wrote it. Sorry.Would you proof read my essay for a college scholarship?
Tim-
Do not post a question and then not bother to resolve it yourself, especially when you are asking people to read over an essay, which takes time. Thanks to you, I am never reading any essays on this forum again- you suck and are a terrible writer!
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Would you proof read my essay for a college scholarship?Wow........
First of all you don't post essays on the Internet someone might steal them.
Second, wow.....Would you proof read my essay for a college scholarship?
I would suggest going to a tutor perhaps to help you with your writing. I know this is not the ideal situation, but honestly, your essay needs a lot of work. Try and see if there is an english or writing tutor in your area, or even at your school. I think the message of your essay is sweet, but the writing really needs a lot of work.
Tim-
Please email me so that I may send you my edits. Yahoo Answers is not allowing me to post such a long response, but I spent too long on this to not have you read it/look over my suggestions.
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